More Paper Comments

– Fabulous intro!
– What belief?
– Muddy
– Stay away from superlatives like this
– Muddy!
– unnecessary hyperbole
– I wonder how much religion plays part–embarrassing, shameful, you can’t be buried in the church yard, etc.
– redundant
– nice footnote!
– dangling modifier
– dangling modifier!
– need to specify whose argument/vocab this is
– I’d switch to present tense here
– ha ha
– Nice title!
– gets vague: stick with the sublime
– good!
– this gets a bit mystical
– give an example of this fear
– I like this!
– not exactly
– can you give evidence of some sort
– what do you mean
– in the form of capitalism? Confused about this timeline!
– Now? Or in the past??
– hmm…not sure about this
– need examples–makes it sound like men are LITERALLY putting women into cages
– not exactly
– BY DANCING
– Great
– nice
– ?
– ??
– I’m getting confused about your timeline
– Good introduction of objects of study
– Wow
– Ship of Theseus!!
– phrase doesn’t make sense
– tautological
– tautology!
– hmmm
– dangling modifiers
– what?
– doesn’t work
– excellent!
– tautology
– confusing
– fascinating! foreground this claim in your intro!
– Nice job dealing with Harold Bloom
– good hook!
– vague and weird!
– I lost track of the subjects of these sentences
– Do we know what Satan looks like?
– Ha!
– !!omg
– Amazing! I had no idea
– Quote Jacob here–I’m interested in what exact statement he makes re: vampires being civilized v. werewolves
– Ha ha!
– Good! Controversial claim, also philosophical and weird!
– avoid grand universalizing statements like this
– strange paragraph…
– non sequitur
– don’t make this claim! Can’t be proven!
– He wasn’t at ALL around!
– who are these people?
– you would need to support this claim with some sort of evidence
– but also his “black cape and mask,” right?
– Ha ha ha!!!
– Byron died in that war!
– and diluting its “Romanticism” (the Romantics loved ghosts)

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